Welcome to all you
wonderful Authors to Weekend Writing Warriors. I am so enjoying reading all
your snippets and can't wait to read more...
Some
good news this week, I received notice that I will be getting a contract and I
am waiting on pins and needles for it to arrive.
Talk about
nervous....
Okay,
on to the story. Last week we left off with Beth Ann yelling and telling Kaylob
not to touch her. I don't think she is one bit happy about him going back. I
know it might seem she should be more understanding.
But
she has been having horrible nightmares about him. Plus he just got
home.
“But, baby, please—”
She threw the orange juice at the wall
and it splattered all over him. “I don’t want to hear any more of your excuses!
Why don’t you just go now if you’re going to leave me anyway!”
Her words hurt him as though he’d been
cut by shards from the broken orange juice glass. He stared at her a moment as
the juice dripped down his shirt, then he turned slowly and walked to the
bathroom, feeling like a complete ass for tilting her world this way. He’d
thought he could make her understand, but maybe that was hoping for too much.
How could anyone who hadn’t been there to see all the horrors of war understand
it?
How will they patch this up? Or will they? Stay tune as the story continues.....
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I'm excited for you Brenda. Hope it gets there soon so you don't have to walk on pins and needles anymore. I am so sad for Kaylob and Beth Ann, war can be so harsh on everyone. I could feel the pain in this scene.
ReplyDeleteThank you Lisa, it was so nice spending yesterday with you. I'm sure hoping it gets here soon but I'm sure they are very busy. :-)
DeleteCongrats Brenda. I feel for him having his woman that angry with him. Maybe it wasn't wise to sign up without telling her. Great job.
ReplyDeleteThank you Alex, maybe you're right. :-)
DeleteSuch a sad and hurtful scene for both of them :'( breaks my heart. An excellent job of writing such dual emotions of anger and pain in eight sentences! Yay for coming contract, this company will be blessed to have such talent :) (does the wiggle dance)
ReplyDeleteCindy R author assistant
Thank you Cindy, for always being here and being my support. :-)
DeleteTerrific job handling the tension and anger in both of them.
ReplyDeleteThank you Willa, Brenda never disappoints the reader that's for sure lol
DeleteCindy R author assistant
Thank you Willa, So glad you could feel that. Thank you for stopping by.
DeleteAn intense scene, I can feel what they're both experiencing.
ReplyDeleteCongrats on the contract!
Thank you Paula, it's awesome how much Brenda is able to make you feel from both POV's in just 8 sentences. Glad you came by :)
DeleteCindy R author assistant
Very intense. I love this. I love that he's an honorable man, that he's volunteering to go back and yet, I can understand where she's coming from to. Which puts them both in very difficult positions. Excellently done. congrats on the contract!
ReplyDeleteThank you Joanne :) it's a nail biting situation for sure. Thank you for visiting the blog <3
DeleteCindy R author assistant
Thank you so much Joanne, I know it's easy to see both sides. But so sad. Thank you for stopping by. :-)
Deletecongrats on the contract and how awful for them both. Great eight and no doubt about the tension happening here.
ReplyDeleteThank you Dean. And you're right it's hard on them both. :-)
Deleteman she's mad! I really can't blame her though, he should have not gone back. I'm on her side all the way. nice job on the stress and congrats on the contract. Hope it comes soon Brenda so you can stop pacing. lol
ReplyDeleteYou tell him Jenn. LOL Thank you for stopping by. Give Colleen my love. :-)
DeleteYou never pull your punches. This is a great scene. Very, very well done.
ReplyDeleteAnd congrats on the contract!!!
Thank you Virginia :) Even has Brenda's assistant and reading with her she never ceases to amaze me with her writing talent. It's wonderful to see others get to enjoy her amazing talent. Thank you for visiting <3
DeleteCindy R author assistant
Thank you Virginia.. :-) And thank you for stopping by.
DeleteYay Brenda, that's amazing news! I wish you all the success in the world. Great snippet. I love the emotions.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Jess :) we are all very excited and emotionally moved by this weeks snippet as well as the good news. <3
DeleteCindy R author assistant
This snippet really shows how devastating this is for both of them. And I have a feeling there is still more heart-wrenching things to come. Fantastic news on the contract! Can't wait to hold my very own copy of this book in my hands!
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Thanks Joyce and you are so right on the money, there is much more!
DeleteCindy R author assistant
You might just be right Joyce. Wonder how you know this? LOL Thank you so much for your support.
DeleteOh man, silence isn't going to work. If he doesn't fight for his woman, he'll lose her so fast. And yeah, anyone who hasn't been to war won't understand, but they definitely won't understand the thinking unless he says something. Love this story even as it rips my heart out, Brenda. :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Siobhan, and you're right, the average person has a difficult time understanding. And it is heart wrenching for both sides.
DeleteCindy R author assistant
Thanks for your feedback. And glad you can feel the emotions that are so gut wrenching. :-)
DeleteCongratulations on the contract...I feel so sorry for your two characters as they try to work through this and understand each other's point of view. Very well done, emotional. Excellent excerpt!
ReplyDeleteThank you Veronica, we are excited for sure :) it's a difficult situation these two are in.
DeleteCindy R author assistant
DeleteYeah for the contract! As to your snippet, that is a tough conversation to have and your writing conveys the emotion. Great 8!
ReplyDeleteThanks History, it is a tough place for these young people to be in. Glad you stopped by for a visit <3
DeleteCindy R author assistant
Thanks so much History, and I don't physically have it yet but I'm hoping it's soon. :-)
DeleteCAN they understand each others' point of view?
ReplyDeleteWell Sue, I guess you'll have to stop by next week and find out ;)So glad you visited <3
DeleteCindy R author assistant
Thank you Sue for stopping by and I think they might understand it sooner or later. It might just take a little time to get there. :-)
DeleteTension! I see her point and his, but they need to talk this out before he goes. It can't be left like this.
ReplyDeleteThank you Karen and you're right, it would make his second tour more dangerous with unsettled issues and her waiting even more treacherous. Stay tuned :) and thank you very much for visiting <3
DeleteAGH! It erased my signature, sorry Karen lol
DeleteCindy R author assistant
A contract! How so exciting! - oh good snippet of course
ReplyDeleteLOL Thank you Sue for you shared excitement, we are on edge a little too, but the good edge of course. Glad you enjoyed the snippet <3
DeleteCindy R author assistant
I'm pulled between both people, his reason for going back, her absolute rage that he'd even think of it. Great snippet and big congrats on your contract.
ReplyDeleteThank you Gem, me too, no matter how often Brenda and I have read through the scene it still gets me. Thank you for visiting :)
DeleteCindy R author assistant
Thank you, I'll sure be glad when they send it. I'm pacing. LOL Glad you enjoyed the snippet. :-)
DeleteWe do react to pain with anger, don't we? You show this brilliantly in this story. I hope they come to some kind of understanding before he leaves! Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteYes you're so right we do. Thank you so much for the feedback and thank you for stopping by. :-)
Deleteamazing tension and plot driven scene. Loved it and happy days to your contract. Hope you get it in your hands soon.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for stopping by Shannon, and I will be so happy when I get it in my hands. :-)
DeleteCongrats on the contract, Brenda! Great scene. I hope her nightmares are just about the fear of something happening to him and not premonitions. But leaving it like that won't help either one of them. They need to patch it up before he leaves, or they'll both regret it.
ReplyDeleteThank you Kate, I'll sure be glad when I have it in my hand. Hmm. Well now I can't tell ya if it's really going to happen or not. But stay tuned. :-) But you're so right they need to patch this up. :-) Thank you for stopping by and your wonderful input.
DeleteCongrats on the contract. This is a great scene. I understand both points of view.
ReplyDeleteThank you Elaine, It's hard to know who's side to be on. :-)
DeleteCongrats on the contract, and nicely intense scene!
ReplyDeleteThank you Sandra. It is intense times. I'm so glad you stopped by. :-)
DeleteCongrats on your contract, Brenda! I enjoyed this snippet! :)
ReplyDeleteI'm so glad you enjoyed it Jane. And thank you so much. :-)
DeleteThe best conflict always comes out of situations where both parties have valid points. Great emotion in this scene, Brenda, and congrats on your contract.
ReplyDeleteThank you Kate, and you're so right they both have their points. :-)
DeleteCongrats on the contract. Intense scene but war is always a tense time for those who serve and for their families. I remember my dad serving during Vietnam, always gone.
ReplyDeleteYes, it was a tense time. My brothers were both in the service and my one was gone all the time two. Thank you so much for stopping by. :-)
DeleteGreat piece. The emotion is blatant, it's so well described in so few words. Fabulous!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for your words. Glad you stopped by. :-)
DeleteI hope they patch it up---what an emotional mess!
ReplyDeleteI hope they will patch things up also. It is a mess and now they have to dig out of it. Thank you Sarah for stopping by. :-)
DeleteVery evocative. I like the imagery with the broken glass. Nice snippet!
ReplyDeleteThank you Linda. I'm so glad you stopped by. :-)
DeleteI agree with Linda Morris. The broken glass action really adds to the tension between these two characters!
ReplyDeleteI just saw you here. Thank you so much for this and for stopping by. :-)
ReplyDeleteWhat an incredibly powerful excerpt. It's raw and beautiful. (Congrats on the contract! I hope it arrived. I'm waiting on one right now and it's brutal, lol.)
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