Sunday, February 17, 2013

A SECOND TOUR


Welcome to Eight Sentence Sunday. I'm so very happy you stopped by. 


As you know last week Kaylob had something to tell Beth Ann and he was nervous and sad. He loves Beth Ann but feels he has to do this. Something shook him to his knees and he feels he has no choice. Kaylob always wants to do the right thing. But was this really the right thing?






 I’m doing a second tour.”
She leaned back to look at him, shock flooding her senses-- this could not be true.
“What do you mean by a second tour? I told you I’d go anyplace they stationed you. I have my passport and—”
“I’m going back to Vietnam.”
All she could do was stare at him, surely she hadn’t heard him right. He was going back to the war? Why would he do that? They couldn’t make him. The military couldn’t force him to fight in that war again! Just the thought made her nauseated.

The storm outside swelled in waves, matching her mood.



                           Next week find out just how upset she is. I don't think Kaylob was prepared or understood how much this would affect her. 


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56 comments:

  1. Same thing happened to my cousin. Her husband decided to go back.
    Very emotional. This should connect with boomers!
    Nice 8.
    (Is it "effect" or "affect?" I never can get it straight! LOL

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    1. Hi Frank. Thanks for visiting and thank you. By the way it's affect I think. :-)

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  2. man! she's not going to be happy. Why would he go back again and leave her? Good job Brenda!

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    1. Thank you Dean. You'll find out more as the story goes along. Thank you for visiting.

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  3. Love it! now I just wonder how that redhead is going to take the news? I'll be back next week to find out.

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    1. One never knows. LOL Thank you Lisa glad you enjoyed. :-)

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  4. Oh, wow. Big things coming up for sure, but for some reason I think they'll work it out somehow. ;-)

    ~Joyce Scarbrough

    P.S. "Affect" is correct in this case.

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  5. Well this decision is going to require a lot of explanation - very intriguing excerpt, can't wait for more.

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    1. Thank you Veronica. Glad you stopped by. :-)

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  6. I feel for her but can relate to him. Great job Brenda!

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    1. Thank you Alex for coming by. I know he's torn for sure. :-)

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  7. trouble ahead and i can feel the tension coming! run. lol

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    1. Oh something is coming alright Jenny. :-) Thank you.

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  8. So sad for both sides, good job making the reader FEEL the situation.

    Cindy R

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    1. Hard times during the Vietnam war. A lot of stuff went on that was not good.

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  9. I could feel the tension and I can't wait to find out why he did this and how she will take the news! Nice!

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    1. Thank you Shannon. You'll find out soon. IT's sad really. :-)

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  10. Oh, you're breaking my heart. I ache for both of them. Terrific snippet!

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    1. Thank you for stopping by. Yes, you'll find out later why he made the choice. Much more to the story. :-)

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  11. Oh no! You surprised me, I hadn't figured it out from last week! I can't wait to read her reaction! :)

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    1. Oh her reaction may raise the tension just a little. :-) Thank you for coming by.

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  12. Tension tension. how will she take the news? I'll be back next week.

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    1. Yes it's going to get higher. Thank you for stopping by. :-)

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  13. Oh, dear. i can understand both sides of this, and it's going to rock this relationship something terrible . . .

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    1. You could just be right Sarah. The thing is he did it without talking it over. She doesn't know his reasoning yet. There is a few reasons he did this. Thank you for stopping by. :-)

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    1. Thank you Sandra and thanks for coming by. :-)

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  15. Oh, there is such terrific tension in this snippet and I'm right there with her shock. Nicely done, Brenda! :)

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    1. Thank you so much. She'll find out more why later but still I don't think she's going to be a happy camper. :-)

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  16. Was this before or after things like the Mai Lai massacre came out?

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    1. This was after. The Mai Lai Massacre happened in the late 60s whereas this is in the early 1970s just before Operation Homecoming. I'm so happy I didn't have to write about that Massacre. Was an awful time. Thank you for stopping by. :-)

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  17. oh very nice excerpt! and the last line is perfect

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    1. Thank you so much Sue, and thank you for stopping by. :-)

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  18. I can see both sides of this issue. He's still got brothers in arms over there and if he stays he might feel like he's deserted them. But she's terrified by the prospect of losing him and doesn't understand why any man in his right mind would volunteer to go back into that hell. He probably doesn't completely understand it himself.

    Fantastic conflict, Brenda!

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    1. More of what happened and why he made the choice besides his brothers in arms will come out soon. Thank you so much for your feedback and for stopping by. :-)

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  19. Great 8 ~ very relatable on both sides! (and that painting below the snippet is absolutely gorgeous!)

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    1. Thank you so much and it is easy to see both sides. Thank you for stopping by and glad you liked the painting. :-)

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    1. Glad you could feel her shock Paula, she was not expecting that at all. :-)

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  21. Wow... I really feel for her... and him, too. What a predicament to be in... to love a man so honorable but have that honor keep you apart! Great snippet!

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    1. Thank you so much Amy. It was a very hard situation. Which may get even harder. :-)

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  22. You convey her horror and his regret very well here, great snippet!

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  23. Thank you A.J. So glad you visited and he is full of regret but with such concern for the other guys. Thank you for stopping by. :-)

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  24. A Vietnam era romance. That's different. It appeals to the historian in me, especially since a lot of war time romance stories seem to be WWII. War is always hard on families. I can see his side as well as hers. Good job showing that. I look forward to next week's snippet!

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  25. There has not been a lot done. I wanted to bring both sides and felt the 60s and 70s were an interesting time. You're right though, there are many WWII but not a lot of the Vietnam War era love stories. Thank you so much for stopping by. :-)

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  26. What an emotional snippet. I could feel her fear and horror that he would willingly go back to war. Great 8.

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  27. Thank you Karen .. It was a scary time no doubt.. I'm so glad you stopped by, thank you for visiting. :-)

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  28. Brenda how much longer before this book is out. We can't wait to read it. Is it still with the publisher? What a great scene.

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  29. I wish I could tell you that but it's with a publisher right now and until I hear back I don't know. But thank you for being patient and waiting for my book.

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  30. I could have heard a pin drop when he told her where he was going. Fabulous show of tension and emotion. Well done.

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    1. Thank you so much. I'm so glad you stopped by. :-)

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  31. What a wonderful scene, pulled me right in!!

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    1. Thank you Dani-Lyn. Glad you enjoyed it. :-)

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  32. Oh, what terrifying news. Though I feel this so well from your words, I cannot imagine hearing this from my husband. You've got me by the collar on this one.

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    1. Thank you Sarah. I know what you mean, I would freak out too, and feeling the emotions wrapped in the scene you are right there with Beth Ann.
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