Thank you for stopping by. Another Sunday snipped.
Last week Kaylob told Beth Ann that he
was going back to do a second tour. She was in shock at first but anger soon
took it's place. Here's a little peek into their conversation.
He’s just told her that she means everything to
him and she can’t believe he decided this without talking it over with her. This is in Kaylob’s POV
He took a step toward her, but she held
up her hand to keep him from coming closer.
“Did you not see how bad it hurt me when
you left the first time? I’ve been stressed and worried every day. I guess that
doesn’t matter so long as you’re with your brothers
over in Vietnam!” Tears streamed down her face.
Kaylob felt like his heart was being
squeezed by a giant fist. He just wanted to put his arms around her and make
her feel better, “baby, I’m sorry, let me hold you.”
“Don’t you dare touch me!”
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Uh oh! she's furious and I see both sides. It's heartbreaking and those pictures were perfect.
ReplyDeleteThanks Lisa, so glad you were around this morning. Glad you enjoyed this.. :-)
DeleteI can feel it building in that scene. Way to build the tension. Is she going to dump him?
ReplyDeleteYes it sure is.. You have to wait and see. LOL Thanks Alex. :-)
DeleteSome people might think her reaction is selfish, but I'm with her all the way. He's already done one tour and served his country. He needs to stay home with the woman who loves him with all her heart!
ReplyDelete~Joyce Scarbrough
I'd be upset with him myself. Wait I was upset with him. I even scolded him while I was writing this. ;-)
DeleteI felt the venom in her last line. Beautiful and heartbreaking. Wow, well done.
ReplyDeleteGlad you felt that. And thank you so very much. :-)
DeleteGreat piece. I can feel her pain. I'd be angry too. Very nice.
ReplyDeleteYou and me both. Thank you for coming by for a visit. :-)
DeleteGreat job with expressing her anger and pain at his decision and showing us how much he cares about her.
ReplyDeleteHe does love her. She's the love of his life and so is he to her. Thank you so much for stopping by. :-)
DeleteThere's some great tension in this scene. Love it!
ReplyDeleteYes there is.. Thank you so much. :-)
DeleteRife with emotion, strongly portrayed :)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, glad you could feel it. ;-)
DeleteA lesson I learned long ago..never do anything that will require an apology later.
ReplyDeleteNice snippet!
Good thing to learn. :-) Thank you so much for stopping by. :-)
DeleteI totally understand her anger and pain. I would be scared to death, hurt and angry too. I also understand why Kaylob has to go back. Very heartbreaking for both
ReplyDeleteCindy R author assistant
Thank you Cindy. It is heartbreaking for them both.
DeleteGreat tension. Pain and anger only brought on because she cares and is scared. Nicely done, and I love the photos you chose to go with this. Perfect!!
ReplyDeleteThank you Karen and you're right. She is very afraid. Thank you so much for stopping by. :-)
DeleteSuper excerpt. Interestingly enough, I'm doing revisions on a story about a guy who enlisted to go to Iraq without telling his wife.
ReplyDeleteI just went and read your snippet. Awesome!!!! loved it. Thank you so much for stopping by. I can't tell you how many revisions I did on book one. Now on book two I'm doing it again. :-)
DeleteBeen there done that - well my characters anyway - well done and damn straight don't come near me!!
ReplyDeleteyeah I'm afraid I'd be saying the same thing. ;-) Thank you Sue.
DeleteA difficult situation all right, very emotional. The excerpt does a terrific job of conveying the way they both feel!
ReplyDeleteIt is a hard one. Thank you so much Veronica, I'm so glad you stopped by..:-)
DeleteI think she might be angry, I know I would be. Loved it!
ReplyDeleteShannon.
Thank you Shannon. She is angry you're right. :-)
DeleteAlmost couldn't get in this morning. The storm is brewing! And I have a sneaky feeling she's very angry. Nice job Brenda!
ReplyDeleteI'm having some issues today also. We are both in Roseburg so maybe it's them. Thanks Dean for stopping by. :-)
DeleteShe must be beside herself! I can feel the emotions of both characters. Great excerpt.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Debbie and I've been trying to get to your blob but it keeps shutting down. I'll try again in a bit. Hope you get this.
DeleteIntense emotional scene. There is no right or wrong here. Good excerpt.
ReplyDeleteVery true, hard to say what is the wrong or right thing to do. I personally wanted him to stay home but my hands wouldn't stop from writing it the other way. :-)
DeleteGreat feeling and dialogue!
ReplyDeleteThank you Sandra, I'm trying to find you and will look again. Thank you for stopping by. :-)
DeleteOh, this is so wrenching for both of them. I can see both sides of this one and it's just plain heart breaking. Great job!
ReplyDelete(and thanks for catching my URL error on FB's Snippet Sunday)
you're most welcome. :-) Thank you for stopping by and I think when I wrote this I was more angry with Kaylob. Go figure. LOL
DeleteHard to be caught between two loves.
ReplyDeleteVery true statement. Thank you for stopping by.:-)
DeleteYeah, it's going to take more than a hug to fix this . . . Poignant snippet!
ReplyDeleteNo kidding huh. Thank you so much and glad you stopped by. :-)
DeleteI feel so bad for both of them! Great writing, Brenda!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Kate, It is a sad thing. Glad you stopped by. :-)
DeletePowerful emotion here, Brenda! Definitely felt their tension. Enjoyed your 8!
ReplyDeleteThank you Karen, glad you could feel it. :-)
DeleteOh poor thing...her man's choice of soldiering is a heartrending one, but he wouldn't be the man she loved if he chose differently.
ReplyDeleteTrue but I think right now she's just so sad and hurt and in fear for his safety. Thank you for stopping by. :-)
DeleteI feel for both of them--I wonder if she'll forgive his choice!
ReplyDeleteGreat snippet! :)
Tune in Jane.:-) Thank you for stopping by. :-)
DeleteMy heart breaks for both of them! Great excerpt!!
ReplyDeleteDani-Lyn Alexander
Thank you so much Dani-Lyn. I'm so glad you stopped by and it is so heart breaking.
DeleteI can feel her anger and his distress - he wants to make it better. Wow, powerful, Brenda. Nicely done. :)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much. I'm glad you liked it.. And thank you for visiting. :-)
DeleteWhat a heartbreaker! I really feel for them both.
ReplyDeleteYes its' so sad.. Thank you for stopping by Sarah.. :-)
DeleteSuch a tough situation for them both to be in. Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much. It is so hard to be in something like that. Thank you so much for stopping by. :-)
ReplyDeletethat is so emotional and sad to see them going through this. awesome scene.
ReplyDeleteThank you Jennifer for stopping by and glad you enjoyed the scene.
DeleteHeartbreaking scene, I feel bad for both of them.
ReplyDeleteThank you Paula, it is so sad for both. Glad you stopped by.
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