Sunday, February 24, 2013

A STORM IS BREWING!


                             Thank you for stopping by. Another Sunday snipped.

Last week Kaylob told Beth Ann that he was going back to do a second tour. She was in shock at first but anger soon took it's place. Here's a little peek into their conversation.

 He’s just told her that she means everything to him and she can’t believe he decided this without talking it over with her. This is in Kaylob’s POV





He took a step toward her, but she held up her hand to keep him from coming closer.
“Did you not see how bad it hurt me when you left the first time? I’ve been stressed and worried every day. I guess that doesn’t matter so long as you’re with your brothers over in Vietnam!” Tears streamed down her face.
Kaylob felt like his heart was being squeezed by a giant fist. He just wanted to put his arms around her and make her feel better, “baby, I’m sorry, let me hold you.”

“Don’t you dare touch me!” 


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64 comments:

  1. Uh oh! she's furious and I see both sides. It's heartbreaking and those pictures were perfect.

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    1. Thanks Lisa, so glad you were around this morning. Glad you enjoyed this.. :-)

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  2. I can feel it building in that scene. Way to build the tension. Is she going to dump him?

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    1. Yes it sure is.. You have to wait and see. LOL Thanks Alex. :-)

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  3. Some people might think her reaction is selfish, but I'm with her all the way. He's already done one tour and served his country. He needs to stay home with the woman who loves him with all her heart!

    ~Joyce Scarbrough

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    1. I'd be upset with him myself. Wait I was upset with him. I even scolded him while I was writing this. ;-)

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  4. I felt the venom in her last line. Beautiful and heartbreaking. Wow, well done.

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    1. Glad you felt that. And thank you so very much. :-)

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  5. Great piece. I can feel her pain. I'd be angry too. Very nice.

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    1. You and me both. Thank you for coming by for a visit. :-)

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  6. Great job with expressing her anger and pain at his decision and showing us how much he cares about her.

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    1. He does love her. She's the love of his life and so is he to her. Thank you so much for stopping by. :-)

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  7. There's some great tension in this scene. Love it!

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  8. Rife with emotion, strongly portrayed :)

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    1. Thank you so much, glad you could feel it. ;-)

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  9. A lesson I learned long ago..never do anything that will require an apology later.
    Nice snippet!

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    1. Good thing to learn. :-) Thank you so much for stopping by. :-)

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  10. I totally understand her anger and pain. I would be scared to death, hurt and angry too. I also understand why Kaylob has to go back. Very heartbreaking for both
    Cindy R author assistant

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    1. Thank you Cindy. It is heartbreaking for them both.

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  11. Great tension. Pain and anger only brought on because she cares and is scared. Nicely done, and I love the photos you chose to go with this. Perfect!!

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    1. Thank you Karen and you're right. She is very afraid. Thank you so much for stopping by. :-)

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  12. Super excerpt. Interestingly enough, I'm doing revisions on a story about a guy who enlisted to go to Iraq without telling his wife.

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    1. I just went and read your snippet. Awesome!!!! loved it. Thank you so much for stopping by. I can't tell you how many revisions I did on book one. Now on book two I'm doing it again. :-)

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  13. Been there done that - well my characters anyway - well done and damn straight don't come near me!!

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    1. yeah I'm afraid I'd be saying the same thing. ;-) Thank you Sue.

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  14. A difficult situation all right, very emotional. The excerpt does a terrific job of conveying the way they both feel!

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    1. It is a hard one. Thank you so much Veronica, I'm so glad you stopped by..:-)

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  15. I think she might be angry, I know I would be. Loved it!

    Shannon.

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    1. Thank you Shannon. She is angry you're right. :-)

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  16. Almost couldn't get in this morning. The storm is brewing! And I have a sneaky feeling she's very angry. Nice job Brenda!

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    1. I'm having some issues today also. We are both in Roseburg so maybe it's them. Thanks Dean for stopping by. :-)

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  17. She must be beside herself! I can feel the emotions of both characters. Great excerpt.

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    1. Thank you so much Debbie and I've been trying to get to your blob but it keeps shutting down. I'll try again in a bit. Hope you get this.

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  18. Intense emotional scene. There is no right or wrong here. Good excerpt.

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    1. Very true, hard to say what is the wrong or right thing to do. I personally wanted him to stay home but my hands wouldn't stop from writing it the other way. :-)

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    1. Thank you Sandra, I'm trying to find you and will look again. Thank you for stopping by. :-)

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  20. Oh, this is so wrenching for both of them. I can see both sides of this one and it's just plain heart breaking. Great job!

    (and thanks for catching my URL error on FB's Snippet Sunday)

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    1. you're most welcome. :-) Thank you for stopping by and I think when I wrote this I was more angry with Kaylob. Go figure. LOL

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    1. Very true statement. Thank you for stopping by.:-)

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  22. Yeah, it's going to take more than a hug to fix this . . . Poignant snippet!

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    1. No kidding huh. Thank you so much and glad you stopped by. :-)

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  23. I feel so bad for both of them! Great writing, Brenda!

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    1. Thank you so much Kate, It is a sad thing. Glad you stopped by. :-)

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  24. Powerful emotion here, Brenda! Definitely felt their tension. Enjoyed your 8!

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    1. Thank you Karen, glad you could feel it. :-)

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  25. Oh poor thing...her man's choice of soldiering is a heartrending one, but he wouldn't be the man she loved if he chose differently.

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    1. True but I think right now she's just so sad and hurt and in fear for his safety. Thank you for stopping by. :-)

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  26. I feel for both of them--I wonder if she'll forgive his choice!
    Great snippet! :)

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    1. Tune in Jane.:-) Thank you for stopping by. :-)

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  27. My heart breaks for both of them! Great excerpt!!

    Dani-Lyn Alexander

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    1. Thank you so much Dani-Lyn. I'm so glad you stopped by and it is so heart breaking.

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  28. I can feel her anger and his distress - he wants to make it better. Wow, powerful, Brenda. Nicely done. :)

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    1. Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked it.. And thank you for visiting. :-)

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  29. What a heartbreaker! I really feel for them both.

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    1. Yes its' so sad.. Thank you for stopping by Sarah.. :-)

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  30. Such a tough situation for them both to be in. Great snippet.

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  31. Thank you so much. It is so hard to be in something like that. Thank you so much for stopping by. :-)

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  32. that is so emotional and sad to see them going through this. awesome scene.

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    1. Thank you Jennifer for stopping by and glad you enjoyed the scene.

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  33. Heartbreaking scene, I feel bad for both of them.

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    1. Thank you Paula, it is so sad for both. Glad you stopped by.

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