Sunday, February 10, 2013

KAYLOB HAS NEWS!



           I left off last week with Kaylob coming home early from Vietnam. Beth Ann is starting to sense something is not right. He's nervous and has something to tell her. So here is a little snippet leading up to him telling her why he got to come home early.

Some of you might know the answer if you lived or had experience with friends or family during the War. 

Thank you for stopping by. 





The tension she felt in his body was making her feel the same.
He coughed and stared at the floor. “Becoming your husband is something I look forward to with all my heart. But, sweetheart, there’s something you need to know.”
She moved her head from his chest and let out a deep sigh. He was nervous—that was pretty darn clear. The rain outside along with the grind from a garbage truck were the only sounds in the room -- A thunderclap made her jump, and his arms tightened around her. They felt protective as always, but she recognized his look of trepidation. Oh God, what’s wrong?
“Kaylob, what’s the matter? You can tell me.”

            
                                                              
                                         Next week find out what Kaylob has to tell Beth Ann. 



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43 comments:

  1. If I didn't already know what he has to tell her, I'd be pretty miffed with you right now, Miss Tease! :-) And where did you get that GORGEOUS sketch? It looks just like Beth Ann and Kaylob!

    ~Joyce Scarbrough

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    1. Nothing like a good tease. LOL Thanks Joyce, I did that in PSP. I love doing art on PSP so it's fun for me. Thanks for always stopping by. :-)

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  2. Does it feel tense in here or is it just me? lol

    Cindy R author assistant

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  3. I can guess - or can I? Great tension-filled excerpt.

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    1. Sure you could guess. :-) Thank you so much for stopping by Paula. :-)

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  4. wow way to leave someone hanging. glad I know what happens. Great scene Brenda.

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    1. I did that just for you Ms. Patience. LOL Glad you stopped by Lisa.:-)

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  5. I don't want to guess, my imagination is filling in so many dreaded possibilities.grrr. Great hook, though! :D

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    1. Next week will be the reveal. Thank you Gem for stopping by and glad you got hooked. :-)

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  6. At least he's trying to talk to her about it, which speaks volumes about the connection between them. Very well done excerpt!

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    1. Thank you so much Veronica, yes he has no choice but to tell her. You'll find out why next week. :-)

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  7. Uh oh, I have a feeling she's not going to be happy. Don't mess with the redhead! Great hook!

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    1. Thank you Dean, you're groovy for stopping by. LOL :-)

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  8. What a teaser. Now we have to wait until next week. Ok, I'll tune in. lol

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    1. Glad you coming back next week Jennifer. Thank you so much. :-)

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  9. I am SO going to be here next week. What a hook!

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    1. Thank you Sarah, glad you stopped by this week and coming next. :-)

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  10. Glad you're on here too! loved the background noise in the scene, made it more real

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    1. Thank you Sue, some of this is the same but I had to rewrite the beginning of the book. So I'm starting from there. Thank you for stopping by and so glad you're back. :-)

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  11. ah! Brenda, that's a terrible place to leave off. ;) Seriously, terrific excerpt. You've got me hanging on the edge of my seat! I also agree about the background noise. It drew me into the scene.

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    1. Thank you Joanne, glad you stopped by and enjoyed. Next week I will reveal what's going on. :-)

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  12. Such a poignant scene. Tender and heartwrenching!

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    1. Thank you so much Amy, glad you enjoyed it and thank you for stopping by. :-)

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  13. Left me hanging lady. I'll be back next week, but what a great scene. Loved the background noise as well.

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    1. Ha ha. Thank you Alex. glad you stopped by and liked it. :-)

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  14. way to go Brenda you tease. loved the scene and I will be back next week.

    Shannon. :)

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    1. I guess I did tease everyone. Glad you're coming back. Thanks Shannon. :-)

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  15. I want to know now! I'll be back next week :-)

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    1. Thank you Virginia-- I promise next week. Thank you for stopping by and glad you're coming back. :-)

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  16. I'm guessing . . . nope. I'll just have to wait! Great scene!

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    1. Thank you Sarah and thanks for stopping back. Next week I reveal. :-)

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  17. Oh gosh! Great tension in this scene--I love your descriptions!
    I can't wait to read more! :)

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    1. Thank you so much. Glad you felt the tension. Next week will reveal why he's home but the tension might just get worse. :-)

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  18. Argh, no...what a cliff-hanger. Needless to say, yes, you hooked me in with that snippet. LOL Looking forward to next week's snippet!

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    1. Thank you so much JoAnne, glad you came by and are coming back next week. Will reveal next week what's going on. :-)

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  19. Very nice. And I like the era of your story. :-)

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    1. Thank you so much Teresa and so glad you stopped by. :-)

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  20. I'll be back next week. I want to know what he has to say. Very intriguing.

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    1. Thank you so much Elaine, next week is he tells her. Glad you're coming back and thank you for visiting. :-)

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  21. I will be back next week! I have a few ideas, but I'm not sure. Great eight, really hooked me.

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    1. Thank you Kate, glad you'll be back and happy you got hooked in. :-)

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  22. Marsha and I both can't wait for next week. We know but we want to see. fantastic Brenda.

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