Last week Beth Ann broke up with Kaylob after she found out he was going back to Vietnam. How would you handle it, if the guy you loved and were engaged to, went back to war without talking it over? Now, she's so upset, she's broken a promise she made to Kaylob and left in one of the worst storms southern California has seen in a very long time.
The town is Riverside, and crime is all around. What will happen when she leaves and goes into the city alone? What will Kaylob do? What will her friends do? As the hours tick by, nobody hears from her? The day turns into night and Beth Ann is all alone. Can they find her?
Beth
Ann trekked through the rain-drenched city. The downpour overflowed the storm
drains, turning the streets into shallow canals. Wind thrashed the treetops
along the sidewalk, flinging leaves in every direction. Her feet were drowning
in the deluge while her bellbottoms soaked through to her skin. She stopped for
a minute and took in the unfamiliar surroundings. Only a few people ventured
out, some huddled under umbrellas, others running with hooded jackets. One man
ran with a newspaper over his head.
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The description of the rain-drenched city perfectly reflects her mood! Wonderful six.
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this scene is really good Brenda, it left me wanting more. Although, I love them all,this is my favorite.
ReplyDeleteawesome Brenda, Colleen and I both love this and it's boarder line spooky!
ReplyDeleteFinally got on here after six times. Brenda, man this scene is set up good and rocks with tension. Great Six Sentence Sunday.
ReplyDeleteThis was set up so nice you can just feel the wet weather. Good job - Cindy <3
ReplyDeleteWow! what a great scene and so well put. Can't wait until next week. I hope she will be okay?
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written...loved the description tying in with her mood :)
ReplyDeleteCan't wait to read more!
ReplyDeleteGreat scene, the description of the rain drenched city is fantastic.
ReplyDeletethat was amazing! I felt that rain all right and a period thriller? sounds like an amazing write.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, this is the most remarks I've ever had. I am so very touched. :-)
ReplyDeleteSounds fantastic Brenda! So descriptive! I could visualize it perfectly :) Great 6.
ReplyDeleteThank you Karen. That is so nice to hear. :-)
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