Sunday, September 16, 2012

Beth Ann's melt down






In this scene Beth Ann fights to stand again, after being almost comatose for two months. She finally realizes that Kaylob is missing in Vietnam, although she’s been told he is dead. But she never felt him die. She refuses to believe he’s dead. But just the knowledge that he’s been gone for two months hits her in this bathroom. This is the very moment she comes to grips with the fact that he might not ever come home again. 




           After a few seconds, she opened the bathroom drawer and calmly took out the scissors, then she began cutting her hair one strand at a time.  An ominous silence swept through the room as she sliced off her hair and jabbed her scalp. From the silence came a wave of pain. The only love she had ever known had been gone for two months. In that moment, she realized all her dreams had to be abandoned. 





From the ashes of war, her love might never return.







Thanks for stopping by. Now I hope you'll check out the official Six Sentence   Sunday site to find more excellent six-sentences.


  Remember to come check out our live chat and Author interview on facebook.  Hope you like my Author page.




22 comments:

  1. Such an intense scene, and the pictures are perfect! Poor Beth Ann. I felt her pain right along with her!

    ~Joyce Scarbrough

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Thank you Joyce, she was in a lot of pain. :-)

      Delete
  2. I know what it's like to lose someone you love so in this scene my heart goes out to her.The pictures help tell the story Brenda. Good job!

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Thank you Alex. Glad you like it and it is always hard to lose someone you love.

      Delete
  3. This was very good and touched my heart. But can you let me read what happened after the storm? lol Great Six Brenda.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. When the book comes out. LOL thank you Dean. :-)

      Delete
  4. omg this is so sad and we want to know what happens next.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Thank you Jenny, Wait until you see what else happens.

      Delete
  5. Oh, wow, I can feel her pain. Very good job! The imagery is fantastic. I would definitely read more.

    Michelle :)

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Thank you so much Michelle. So glad you enjoyed it.

      Delete
  6. Very poignant. I can really feel her pain with her, that moment when it hits. Fantastic six.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Thank you Joanne, she really got hit hard and so glad you enjoyed it. :-)

      Delete
  7. The ultimate point of explosion. Very sad.

    ReplyDelete
  8. Very powerful. Could feel her pain and sadness. Excellent six.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Thank you Karen, Glad you could feel her pain and enjoyed the scene. :-)

      Delete
  9. I can feel her pain, very intense and very sad. Nice Six! How much longer before I can hold this book in my hand? Any ideas?

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Thanks Shannon, can't really give an answer on how much longer. It's with a publisher. Hopefully we will know soon. :-)

      Delete
  10. this might be historical fictiion to you, but I lived through it. And your snippets moisten my eyes each week

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Actually, so did I, in many ways. Would love to hear more about what you experienced sometime if you felt up to it. I know for some people it was such a hard time, they don't like to talk about it. But thank you for reading my Six Sentence. My heart is touched.

      Delete
  11. Really good scene Brenda, i just now could get in. but loved it.

    ReplyDelete
  12. Thank you Jennifer. Glad you came and could get it. :-)

    ReplyDelete